The feedback on my first pitch was very constructive. A lot
of people mentioned that the hook was good, as it puts you in the shoes of the
potential customer. Many of the comments agreed with the problem and thought the
solution of building up was good. One constructive criticism was about the flow
of the pitch and connecting the solution to the problem. I have attempted to
remedy this by explaining how the problem relates to the solution at the end of
the pitch.
Caroline,
ReplyDeleteYou did a good hook like you did last time, it really puts students in the perspective that you are trying to accomplish. I totally agree with your opportunity, and also took a different solution after my freshman year. The different solutions you give really help put your opportunity in perspective. Maybe try to talk slower next time, but everything else was good!
Caroline,
ReplyDeleteThis is a huge problem that need to be addressed by the university. Before I lived a walking distance away from school I had to take a bus which the ride can vary from 15-30 minutes depending on stops and traffic. Once off the bus you have to walk to your destination which added an extra 5-10 minutes. the margin for error of traveling to school is large and unreliable also if the RTS app isn't accurate with where the bus is you could miss the bus and be delayed even more. UF is expanding but are that expanding in a controlled manner that can accommodate everyone. I wont see the day that UF builds a new parking garage because I graduate very soon. This problem isn't only a UF problem, with new luxury apartment complexes popping up around mid town that can house a 1000 people will they have enough room in there garage to park all the cars or can the tenants afford the extra $100 dollars a month to park their car.
Caroline,
ReplyDeleteI agree with you that this is a huge issue and it a student should not be forced to simply avoid this they should be able to park on campus to make it to their classes. As for your elevator pitch I thought it was great but it seems like you have a little too much information that you are trying to get across. Maybe if you take out a little of examples and keep the crucial points you will be able to talk slower to stay within the time frame of the pitch. Great job though.